I reviewed my haiku pointers last night and realized I've been doing my poems wrong. I started dabbling with this beautiful Japanese poetry just last week, and I know I have a long way to go till I get it down pat. Nowhere in any site does it say that it is going to be easy, anyway. Writing extraordinarily out of the ordinary, in three lines of 17 syllables or less, is definitely not a breeze - not for me, that is.

In particular, I realized that I was writing in three fragments. Haiku (and senryu) is generally written in two parts: a fragment on the first or last line, and a phrase/sentence split on the other two lines. As a guide, a good structure for a beginner like me is:

So I did some tweaking on my poems, and I do hope it is better this time, at least technically. Here is an example:


hint of dawn
half awake, half asleep
jeepneys chug and sputter


crack of dawn
jeepneys chug and sputter

Okay, so "special" may not yet be written all over this haiku, but you know what they say! Practice makes perfect! :)


posted by vina @ 12:01 PM            | links to this post

The almost-comeback kid

I wanted to write something that could pass as witty about my semi-return to blogging, but really, the smell of adobo wafting from the office kitchen is killing me. It's paralyzing what's left of my working brain cells. I can't even work (which reminds me, I am supposed to work).

I am blaming everything on the well-marinated chicken and pork adobo simmering in the huge pot, with lots of peppercorn and laurel leaves. It is pure evil.

P.S. We are having a summer outing tomorrow, thus, the wicked adobo.
I forgive, but I don't forget. It is going down.

posted by vina @ 3:03 PM            | links to this post

It's been a while

four o'clock
papers stacked, but ~
my first haiku

(May 13, 2009, 4:00 pm)


posted by vina @ 9:39 PM            | links to this post